Wednesday 13th January
L.O. To write effective sentences
Use this page to write down your ideas for the sentences:
(Try to write some ideas down before our Zoom session this morning if you can)
Mr Spencer’s sentences
When I awoke, I was in a dark, damp place.
I could see a patchwork of emerald and gold fields, glistening on the horizon.
I stumbled towards it. Soon, I realised I was lost. Completely lost. Completely, utterly lost.
Now have a go at your own sentences!
Sentence 1: Add more description of what the character can see and feel in the cave.
Sentence 2: Add more description of what the character can see from the entrance of the cave.
Sentence 3: Add more description of how the character is feeling - maybe you could use some ‘show not tell’.